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the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie chart compares electronica and appliances, food and beverages. Home furnishing and video game sales in a retail shop in Canada, from 2005 to 2010. Overall, the majority proportion of sales in 2005 was Electronic and Appliances whereas, the lowest proportion was Video games. Similarly, in 2010 Food and beverage had the highest percentage of sales and Home furnishing the least. In detail, Video games accounted for 18% of sales in a shop during 2005 which increased two times during 2010 leading to 32%. Also, Food and beverages had 22% of total sales which showed a significant increase to one third resulting to 32% respectively. On the other hand electronic and home furnishing experienced a decrease in proportion during the years. Electronics and Appliances had majority of proportion of sales in 2005 which decreased by a slight proportion to 30% whereas, home furnishing was one-fourth (25%) which decreased by one tenth in 2010 resulting in 15%.
The two pie chart compares electronica and appliances, food and beverages. Home furnishing and video game
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in a retail shop in Canada, from 2005 to 2010.

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of
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sales
in 2005 was Electronic and Appliances whereas, the lowest
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was Video games.
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, in 2010 Food and beverage had the highest percentage of
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sales
and Home furnishing the least.

In detail, Video games accounted for 18% of
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sales
in a shop during 2005 which increased two times during 2010 leading to 32%.
Also
, Food and beverages had 22% of total
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which
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a significant increase to one third resulting to 32%
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during the years. Electronics and Appliances had
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majority of
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of
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in 2005 which decreased by a slight
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to 30% whereas, home furnishing was one-fourth (25%) which decreased by one tenth in 2010 resulting in 15%.
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IELTS academic the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

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