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The charts compare four retail sectors in Canada in terms of the proportion of their internet sales in two years, 2005 and 2010.

The charts compare four retail sectors in Canada in terms of the proportion of their internet sales in two years, 2005 and 2010. Overall, the proportion of online sales for each of the four sectors changed significantly from 2005 to 2010. While the figures for food and beverages, and video games increased, the figures for the other two sectors fell. In 2005, the proportion of online sales of food and beverages was 22%, but this rose to 32% in 2010. The percentage for internet sales of video games also went up, by 5% from the 2005 figure of 18%. In contrast, the percentages of the online sales of the other sectors decreased. The most dramatic fall was in the home furnishings retail sector. While this figure was 25% of these four sectors’ total online sales in 2005, it fell to just 15% in 2010. There was also a decrease in the electronics and appliances sector, which saw a fall from 35% in 2005 to 30% in 2010.
The charts compare four retail
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sectors
in Canada in terms of the proportion of their internet
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sales
in two years, 2005 and 2010.

Overall
, the proportion of
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online
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sales
for each of the four
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sectors
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changed
significantly
from 2005 to 2010. While the
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figures
for food and beverages, and video games increased, the
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figures
for the other two
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sectors
fell.

In 2005, the proportion of
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online
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sales
of food and beverages was 22%,
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but
this rose to 32% in 2010. The percentage for internet
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sales
of video games
also
went up, by 5% from the 2005
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figure
of 18%.

In contrast
, the percentages of the
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online
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sales
of the other
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sectors
decreased. The most dramatic fall was in the home furnishings retail
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sector
. While this
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figure
was 25% of these four
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sectors’
total
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online
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sales
in 2005, it fell to
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just
15% in 2010. There was
also
a decrease in the electronics and appliances
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sector
, which
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saw
a fall from 35% in 2005 to 30% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The charts compare four retail sectors in Canada in terms of the proportion of their internet sales in two years, 2005 and 2010.

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