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The two pie chart illustrate how different industry sectors contribution to the economy of Turkey percentagewise in the years 2000 and 2016

The two pie chart illustrate how different industry sectors contribution to the economy of Turkey percentagewise in the years 2000 and 2016 XGGgE
The pie charts illustrate how various industry sectors shared to the economy of Turkey over the 16 period. Overall, at the begining period agriculture was most significant economy sector and construction was the lowest to the economy of Turkey and the end of the period the figure for healthcare and education become the largest segment To begin with, in 2000, agriculture was responsible the most significant share of contribution to the economy of Turkey however, over the 16 period there was significantly decrease in 14 %. there was little difference between the figure for construction and manufacturing as the farmer contributed, the second highest percentage with 8% while the share the latter was marginally lower 6% followed by two sectors had considerably increased in 2016, account for 10% and 12 %. The percentage of leisure and hospitality and healthcare and study shared similar proportion which was 17 % in 2000 by contrast, the former has slightly fall 14%, the latter has the remain stable unchanged 17% in 2016
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sector and construction was the lowest to the
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of Turkey and the
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IELTS academic The two pie chart illustrate how different industry sectors contribution to the economy of Turkey percentagewise in the years 2000 and 2016

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