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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. ljj3o
The given bar graph compares the citizens expenditure on three categories like food and drink, restaurant and hotel and entertainment by different age group of British citizens in the year 2004. Overall, food and drink is the around 23 % in the highest use of age of above 76. whereas restaurant and hotel is the 14% in highest use of age under 30 and entertainment is the about 6% of lowest use in the age of under 30. Food and drink is the steadily increase to the age by age to around 6% in age of under 30, around 12% in age of 31-45 & increased to the age groups of 46-60, 61-75 and above 76 which is around 16%, 20% and about 23%. Restaurant and hotel is the 14% around age of under 30. While the figures for same about 13% up to the age groups below 60 years.
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expenditure on three categories like food and drink, restaurant and hotel and entertainment by
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group of British citizens in the year 2004.
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, food and drink is the
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23 % in the highest
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of above 76.
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under 30 and entertainment is the about 6% of
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of under 30,
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12% in
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of 31-45 & increased to the
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groups of 46-60, 61-75 and above 76 which is
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16%, 20% and about 23%. Restaurant and hotel is the 14%
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of under 30. While the figures for same about 13% up to the
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groups below 60 years.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

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5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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