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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. 2bb2o
The illustrated diagram below depicts the 5 steps on how carbonated drinks are made. Overall, there are 5 crucial steps to produce carbonated drinks. In chronological order, first, water cleaning followed by heating evaporation and carbonation mixing the, filtering and filling and lastly, packaging and transport to the the markets are the crucial steps on successfully Firstly, raw water from the tank will filter and mix with a water softener together with chemicals. Secondly, these mixture will then pump and transport through the use of electric heaters wherein the cooling pipe is connected to the large tank wherein carbon dioxide will evaporate. Moreover, a huge tank is connected to a long pipe wherein water was being transferred after being carbonated. The third step, a huge tank has a different buttons for flavouring, colouring and adding syrup takes place. Furthermore, another filtering and filling are set up to make sure that the items passed the quality control. Lastly, bottles and cans are being separated quickly and putting it a separated boxes.
The illustrated diagram below depicts the 5
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steps
on how carbonated drinks
are made
.

Overall
, there are 5 crucial
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steps
to produce carbonated drinks. In chronological order,
first
,
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water
cleaning followed by heating evaporation and carbonation mixing
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the,
filtering and filling and
lastly
, packaging and transport to
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the the
markets are the crucial
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steps
on
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successfully


Firstly
, raw
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water
from the
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tank
will filter and mix with a
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water
softener together with chemicals.
Secondly
,
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these mixture
will then pump and transport through the
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use
of electric heaters wherein the cooling pipe
is connected
to the large
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tank
wherein carbon dioxide will evaporate.

Moreover
, a huge
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tank
is connected
to a long pipe wherein
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water
was
being transferred
after
being carbonated
. The third
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step
, a huge
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tank
has a
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different
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buttons
for
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flavouring
,
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colouring
and adding syrup takes place.
Furthermore
, another filtering and filling
are set
up to
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make
sure that the items passed the quality control.
Lastly
, bottles and cans are
being separated
quickly
and putting it a separated
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boxes
.
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170 words
6.0
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