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The two pictures depict the layout of Langley City from 1910 to 1950.

The two pictures depict the layout of Langley City from 1910 to 1950. OweVM
The two pictures depict the layout of Langley City from 1910 to 1950. Overall, a number of noticeable improvements can be seen in those maps, particularly in the removal of industrial and sanitation areas in the early of 19 century and the development of Sherman park and other infrastructures in the middle of 19 century. In 1910, the housing was dominated the Langley ground on the east side and in the middle of the city. On the top of the maps, a factory and a wasteland stood together. Furthermore, alongside two rows of houses in Sherman Street, there was a store, laundry, and cafe. In addition, there was a wasteland in the south area, a railway worker's cottage, and a railway line on the south. After thirty years, a significant improvement can be seen in some places. A lot of townhouses had been replaced by some flats, while an industrial area had been demolished to make way for Sherman Mansions. Moreover, some places, including wasteland, worker's cottages, and railway, were flattened to provide more space on Sherman Park and the opening of New Lane street. Furthermore, store buildings had improved, and other trading buildings had been relocated.
The two pictures depict the layout of Langley City from 1910 to 1950.

Overall
, a number of noticeable improvements can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in those maps,
particularly
in the removal of industrial and sanitation areas in
The phrase 'the early of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the early of
Did you mean "19th century"?
19 century
and the development of Sherman park and other infrastructures in the middle of
Did you mean "19th century"?
19 century
.

In 1910, the housing
was dominated
the Langley ground on the east side and in the middle of the city. On the top of the maps, a factory and a wasteland stood together.
Furthermore
, alongside two rows of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
in Sherman Street, there was a store, laundry, and
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
.
In addition
, there was a wasteland in the south area, a railway worker's cottage, and a railway line on the south.

After thirty years, a significant improvement can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in
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some
places.
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A lot of
townhouses had
been replaced
by
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some
flats, while an industrial area had
been demolished
to
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make
way for Sherman Mansions.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
places, including wasteland, worker's cottages, and railway,
were flattened
to provide more space on Sherman Park and the opening of New Lane street.
Furthermore
, store buildings had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
, and other trading buildings had
been relocated
.

IELTS academic The two pictures depict the layout of Langley City from 1910 to 1950.

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