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The two maps show the change that took place at the seaside resort

The two maps show the change that took place at the seaside resort XVxeN
The two maps illustrate the transformation that occurred at the seaside resort of Templeton from 2000 to 2013. Between 2000 and 2013, the seaside resort witnessed many remarkable changes. It is clear that there was a modernization taking place in this resort because a great number of contemporary infrastructures and facilities were constructed. Generally, the main structure of the resort remained unchanged. In 2000, there were a large number of trees, which were located mostly northwest of the resort, but in 2013, they were cut down and replaced by many blocks of flats and houses. The school and hospital in 2000 were not removed, and some new houses were built on the northeast side of the seaside resort. On the southwest side of the resort, there were some dramatic changes. The land was separated by a path running from east to west. A new supermarket and some modern blocks of flats were built in the place of the old houses in 2000. Furthermore, there was a factory that situated southeast of the resort and a new railway was constructed in order to connect the two lands on the south side. The last change was the sea, which was converted into ferry.
The two maps illustrate the transformation that occurred at the seaside
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of Templeton from 2000 to 2013.

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remained unchanged. In 2000, there were
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in 2013, they were
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blocks of flats and
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. The school and hospital in 2000 were not removed, and
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on the northeast side of the seaside resort.

On the southwest side of the
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, there were
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. The land
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modern blocks of flats
were built
in the place of the
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in 2000.
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and a new railway
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was the sea, which
was converted
into ferry.
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