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The two maps of the centre of the towns of islip give information about the city currently and in the future.

The two maps of the centre of the towns of islip give information about the city currently and in the future. ElL1q
The two maps of the centre of the towns of islip give information about the city currently and in the future. Overall, a lot of modifications can be observed during the forecast development. First of all, according to the current map the centre is close to a countryside. A main road deserves houses, a school, several shops and a park. Looking more closely at the map predicting the future development of the city, a lot of modifications can be observed. The size of the centre will increase in an oval shape, therefore the countryside will disappear. Moreover, the singel road will be replaced by a bigger dual carriageway. A pedestrian way will deserve the central area. New houses will be built with the new facilities such as bus station and a parking. The shops will be grouped in a shopping mall. The next point is the garden area which will be similar. As the city will have more people the school will be bigger. To sum up, between the actual map of islip town centre and the future planned development, a lot of modifications are predicted. On the one hand the city will be bigger with more facilities. On the other hand the park will be reduced and the countryside will disappear. The city will have changed a great deal.
The two
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of the
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centre
of the towns of
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islip
give information about the city
currently
and in the future.
Overall
,
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a lot of
modifications can
be observed
during the forecast development.

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, according to the
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current
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map
the
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centre
is close to a countryside. A main road deserves
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houses
, a school, several shops and a park.

Looking more
closely
at the
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map
predicting the future development of the city,
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a lot of
modifications can
be observed
. The size of the
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centre
will increase in an oval shape,
therefore
the countryside will disappear.
Moreover
, the
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singel
road will
be replaced
by a bigger dual carriageway. A pedestrian way will deserve the central area. New
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houses
will
be built
with the new facilities such as bus station and a parking. The shops will
be grouped
in a shopping mall. The
next
point is the garden area which will be similar.
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As
the city will have more
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people
the school will be bigger.

To sum up, between the actual
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map
of
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islip
town
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centre
and the future planned development,
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a lot of
modifications
are predicted
. On the one hand the city will be bigger with more facilities.
On the other hand
the park will be
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reduced
and the countryside will disappear. The city will have
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changed
a great deal.
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IELTS academic The two maps of the centre of the towns of islip give information about the city currently and in the future.

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