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The two maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present depict the many changes that occurred over a period of time.

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The two maps of Paradise Island in the past and the present depict the many changes that occurred over a period of time. Overall, Paradise island now has been transformed into a well-facilitated tourist destination. The island seemed undeveloped in the past, with palm trees dotted around it. The only establishment at that time was the scientific research station. A pier was located on the west coast of the island, allowing boats to access the shores and a beach was towards the Northwest of the island. To the East, there existed a natural spring, which was not far away from some rocks in the Northeast. At present, the research station is replaced by a huge hotel with swimming pool access towards its North. The pier is enlarged, where cruise ship passengers enter the island. An open restaurant and a BBQ area were constructed in the center of the island. To the south of the spring, a cafe is set up. A scenic lookout is opened at the Northwest of the rocks. People are now permitted on the beach. Interestingly, there is a cycle path connecting to all mentioned facilities.
The two maps of Paradise
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island
seemed undeveloped in the past, with palm trees dotted around it. The
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only
establishment at that time was the scientific research station. A pier
was located
on the west coast of the
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island
, allowing boats to access the shores and a beach was towards the Northwest of the
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island
. To the East, there existed a natural spring, which was not far away from
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some
rocks in the Northeast.

At present, the research station
is replaced
by a huge hotel with swimming pool access towards its North. The pier
is enlarged
, where cruise ship passengers enter the
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island
. An open restaurant and a BBQ area
were constructed
in the center of the
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island
. To the south of the spring, a
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cafe
is set
up. A scenic lookout
is opened
at the Northwest of the rocks.
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People
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permitted on the beach.
Interestingly
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