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The two maps illustrates the comparision of the Grange Park since the first time opened in the year 1920 to present.

The two maps illustrates the comparision of the Grange Park since the first time opened in the year 1920 to present. PL5KE
The two maps illustrates the comparision of the Grange Park since the first time opened in the year 1920 to present. It is noticeable that 3 main modifications were made in the area including construction of Rose garden, amphitheate of concerts and children’s play area. Look in the changes of the 2 maps for more details, in the centre of the park, Fountain has been demolition to make room for Rose Garden in today. Moreover, 2 rose gardens in the past has been destruction, and one to take place for the new café. Besides, the 2 entrance from Anrold road evanue and Eldon street are still remain. Today, one more entrance were built is the entrance underground car park with purpose create a convenience environment to citizens when visit this public park. As can be seen from the 2 maps, stage of musicans in the left side of the park are redeveloped, and amphitheatre of concert is site on that place. Last but not least, one major change of the park is glasshouse, this building is no longer appear in recent because that area now is for water feature.
The two maps illustrates the
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comparision
of the Grange
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Park
since the
first
time opened in the year 1920 to present.

It is noticeable that 3 main modifications
were made
in the area including construction of Rose garden,
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amphitheate
of concerts and children’s play area.

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changes
of the 2 maps for more
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details
, in the
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centre
of the
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park
, Fountain has been demolition to
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make
room for Rose Garden in
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today
.
Moreover
, 2 rose gardens in the past has been destruction, and one to take place for the new café.
Besides
, the 2 entrance from
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Anrold
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evanue
and Eldon street are
still
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remain
.
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Today
, one more entrance
were built
is the entrance underground car
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park
with purpose create a convenience environment to citizens when visit this public park.

As can be
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seen
from the 2 maps, stage of
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musicans
in the
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left
side of the
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park
are redeveloped
, and
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amphitheatre
of concert is site on that place. Last
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but
not least, one major
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change
of the
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park
is glasshouse, this building is no longer appear in recent
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because
that area
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now
is for water feature.
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