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The two maps illustrate the main changes which take place in a city in 1950 and nowadays

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The two maps illustrate the main changes which take place in a city in 1950 and nowadays. It is clear that there are many new changes in infrastructure. Especially, the residential area a lot has changed and it has been expanded. As regards the top of the map, in 1950 there were 2 main roads. These two roads were built across the residential area and business district. In addition, there was a bridge across the river. Meanwhile, the residential area has been expanded it has occupied more than 1/3 of the city's area. These two roads and the bridge have still existed. However, there have been constructed of 2 lakes. As far as under the top, in 1950 there was a small dam it was located below the bridge. The airport was situated in the east. And up to now, there have been changed in the city. The business district and the residential area have been enlarged. Besides, there has been erected of the main road. In addition, the government building has been built in the south. The airport has been expanded
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in infrastructure.
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, the
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area
a lot has
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changed
and it has
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.

As regards the top of the map, in 1950 there were 2 main
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roads
. These two
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roads
were built
across the
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residential
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area
and business district.
In addition
, there was a bridge across the river. Meanwhile, the
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residential
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area
has
been expanded
it has occupied more than 1/3 of the city's
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area
. These two
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roads
and the bridge have
still
existed.
However
, there have
been constructed
of 2 lakes.

As far as under the top, in 1950 there was a
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small
dam it
was located
below the bridge. The airport
was situated
in the east. And up to
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now
, there have been
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changed
in the city. The business district and the
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residential
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area
have
been enlarged
.
Besides
, there has
been erected
of the main
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road
.
In addition
, the
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government
building has
been built
in the south. The airport has been
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IELTS academic The two maps illustrate the main changes which take place in a city in 1950 and nowadays

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