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The two maps illustrate the changes which have taken place in a public park, namely Grange park between 1920 and now

The two maps illustrate the changes which have taken place in a public park, namely Grange park between 1920 and now Ky506
The two maps illustrate the changes which have taken place in a public park, namely Grange park between 1920 and now. Overall, this park has been transformed, with more play area, Amphitheatre and water feature having been built. With regard to the western part of the park, one interesting change is that the stage for musicians has been replaced with an Amphitheatre for concerts. Another striking change is that the Rose garden in the south-west of the park has been knocked down. Moreover, the fountain in the center of the park has been demolished to make way for a new Rose garden. In 1920, there used to be four sets of seats near the two Rose gardens in the north-west and south-west of the park, but they have been transferred to around the new rose garden which has been constructed in the center part of the park. If we look at the eastern part of the park, there used to be a pond for water plants, but, now, it has been converted to a children’s play area. Another striking development is that the rose garden in the eastern part of the entrance from ARNOLD AVENUE has been replaced with a cafe. As for the south-east part, we can see that the glass feature and the seats have been removed to build a new water feature. A final interesting development is that a new entrance underground car park has been provided in the south-east part of the park.
The two maps illustrate the
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changes
which have taken place in a public
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park
,
namely
Grange
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park
between 1920 and
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now
.
Overall
, this
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park
has
been transformed
, with more play area,
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Amphitheatre
and water feature having
been built
.

With regard to the western
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part
of the
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park
, one interesting
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change
is that the stage for musicians has
been replaced
with an
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Amphitheatre
for concerts. Another striking
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change
is that the
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Rose
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garden
in the south-west of the
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park
has
been knocked
down.
Moreover
, the fountain in the center of the
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park
has
been demolished
to
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make
way for a
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new
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Rose
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garden
. In 1920, there
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used
to be four sets of seats near the two
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Rose
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gardens
in the north-west and south-west of the
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park
,
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they have
been transferred
to around the
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new
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rose
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garden
which has
been constructed
in the center
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part
of the park.

If we look at the eastern
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of the
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park
, there
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used
to be a pond for water plants,
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but
,
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now
, it has
been converted
to a children’s play area. Another striking development is that the
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rose
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garden
in the eastern
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part
of the entrance from ARNOLD AVENUE has
been replaced
with a
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cafe
. As for the south-east
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part
, we can
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see
that the glass feature and the seats have
been removed
to build a
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new
water feature. A final interesting development is that a
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new
entrance underground car
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park
has
been provided
in the south-east
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part
of the
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park
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IELTS academic The two maps illustrate the changes which have taken place in a public park, namely Grange park between 1920 and now

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