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The two maps illustrate how Grange park has been changed from its open in 1920to the present.

The two maps illustrate how Grange park has been changed from its open in 1920to the present. A3B5L
The rendered two maps reveal information about the Grange park has been altered between 1920 and present. At the first glance, it is evident that visitors could enter the park on Arnold Avenue from the north or the Southern one on Eldon Street; However, the path now has a new underground parking entrance. Moreover, the centre of the fountain was demolished as well as replaced with enormous rose garden by plethora of seats. Similarly, there was another rose garden together with pond for water plants to the east of the Northern entry was replaced with cafe among children's play region. In addition, rose garden on the bottom right-hand side converted into huge Amphitheater for concerts, and glasshouse towards the South-East direction one has gone with new water feature. Overall, it is analyzed that park has been rearranged significantly, and more infrastructure has been built in Grange park over the given period.
The rendered two maps reveal information about the Grange
park
has
been altered
between 1920 and present.

At the
first
glance, it is evident that visitors could enter the
park
on Arnold Avenue from the north or the Southern one on Eldon Street;
However
, the path
now
has a new underground parking entrance.
Moreover
, the
centre
of the fountain
was demolished
as well
as replaced with enormous rose garden by plethora of seats.

Similarly
, there was another rose garden together with pond for water plants to the east of the Northern entry
was replaced
with
cafe
among children's play region.
In addition
, rose garden on the bottom right-hand side converted into huge Amphitheater for concerts, and glasshouse towards the South-East direction one has
gone with
new water feature.

Overall
, it
is analyzed
that
park
has
been rearranged
significantly
, and more infrastructure has
been built
in Grange
park
over the
given
period.

IELTS academic The two maps illustrate how Grange park has been changed from its open in 1920to the present.

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