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The two maps below show the changes in town of Stokeford between the year 1930 and 2010

The two maps below show the changes in town of Stokeford between the year 1930 and 2010 o8dKw
The two pictures describe how a town called Stokeford change in 80 years from 1930. From an overall perspective, it can be seen that the place has become more densely populated than before with the disappearance of several farmlands were replaced by houses. There was no change in the location of the bridge. In 1930, the village consisted mostly of farmlands. On both sides of the road, there were some shops, a post office, a small primary school, and houses were added along the main road. In the east of the village, a large house was surrounded by gardens. In the following eighty-year period, River Stroke, the post office, and the bridge maintained constant. However, two farmlands in the NE and SW were destroyed, and then new roads, houses were constructed in their original places. The primary school opposite the post office has been extended virtually double in size. Additionally, the gardens were diminished to make new ways, houses, and a large house also was developed, became bigger.
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Stokeford
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in 80 years from 1930.

From an
overall
perspective, it can be
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that the place has become more
densely
populated than
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with the disappearance of several farmlands
were replaced
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houses
. There was no
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in the location of the bridge.

In 1930, the village consisted
mostly
of farmlands. On both sides of the road, there were
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shops, a post office, a
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small
primary school, and
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houses
were
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added
along the main road. In the east of the village, a large
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house
was surrounded
by gardens.

In the following eighty-year period, River Stroke, the post office, and the bridge maintained constant.
However
, two farmlands in the NE and SW were
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destroyed
, and then new roads,
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houses
were constructed
in their original places. The primary school opposite the post office has
been extended
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double in size
.
Additionally
, the gardens
were diminished
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new ways,
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houses
, and a large
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also
was developed
, became bigger.

IELTS academic The two maps below show the changes in town of Stokeford between the year 1930 and 2010

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