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Look at the line graph and use the language in Exercise 12 to describe the way each line in the graph changes.

Look at the line graph and use the language in Exercise 12 to describe the way each line in the graph changes. drjpK
This chart shows percentage of people who own the devices from 2010 to 2025. In order devices that will be describe are smart phone, laptop, smart watch, tablet. The trend line of smart phone is ascending, in 2010 started with less than 40% and it rise to nearly 90%. But laptop not as the same as smart phone and it starts from 60% and increase to 70% then stopped and decrease, it predicts it will fall under 60%. Smart watch line shows requests for buy this device went up and it is expected that increase in future. The last one is tablet that it rises upper than 60% to 2020 but it predicts that it decreases until 2025. According to the chart in future requirement for smart watch and smart phone will went up and laptop and tablet will go down. We accept for tablet that decrease because of size and it difficult to move it but about laptop the most important point is phones progress that can replace a laptop and people can do their work with their smart phone without needs laptop.
This chart
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shows
percentage of
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people
who
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own
the devices from 2010 to 2025. In order devices that will be
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describe
are
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smart
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phone
,
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laptop
,
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smart
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watch
, tablet.

The trend line of
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smart
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phone
is ascending, in 2010
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started
with less than 40% and it
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rise
to
nearly
90%.
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But
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laptop
not as the same as
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smart
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phone
and it
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starts
from 60% and increase to 70% then
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stopped
and decrease, it predicts it will fall under 60%.
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Smart
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watch
line
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shows
requests for
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buy
this device went up and it is
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expected
that increase
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in future
. The last one is tablet that it rises upper than 60% to 2020
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but
it predicts that it decreases until 2025.

According to the chart in future requirement for
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smart
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and
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smart
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phone
will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "go"
went
up and
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laptop
and tablet will go down. We accept for tablet that decrease
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because
of size and
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it
difficult to
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move
it
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but
about
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laptop
the most
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important
point is
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phones
progress that can replace a
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laptop
and
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people
can do their work with their
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smart
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phone
without needs
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laptop
.
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IELTS academic Look at the line graph and use the language in Exercise 12 to describe the way each line in the graph changes.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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