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In this day and age, technology development has a greatly impact on human relationships and the way of interaction between many people. However, I believe that it also has both positive and negative side

In this day and age, technology development has a greatly impact on human relationships and the way of interaction between many people. However, I believe that it also has both positive and negative side On the one hand, cutting-aged technology brings several benefits for people. The first positive is that it helps us contact each other easier. In the past, people used to write letters, ask someone to transport the information and send by birds, which took quite a long time. However, nowadays, just by a click-through email or social media or phone, our messages are sent immediately to receivers. Facebook, for example, is the most popular online network with nearly billions of uses in which people can interact with their friends in different locations or even in other nations like voice calls or video calls. In addition, thanks to this development, people can have a chance to find a lot of friends by surfing social networking sites. On the other hand, technology also has some negatives impacts on people. If people depend too much on modern devices, they will suffer from various problems. Teenagers, for instance, often spend 5 or even 6 hours per day wandering on social networks, contact with strangers, and do not care about things that happened in real world which can lead them to isolation or illusion or have some violent behaviors. In conclusion, although modern devices bring many potential things for people, we should use this properly, especially on human’s relationship.

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