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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. xWr9

Firstly, it can be clearly seen that the vast majority of the island area was almost unused. Since it has only a small beach on its western part and some trees planted on both sides of the island. However, the central zone of the island was merely free. On the other hand. Numerous facilities were built later. First of all, a reception was constructed in the heart of the central region. This reception was connected to a restaurant in the northern area and the pier in the Southern part by a car truck. In addition, this pier was used for boat trips. Furthermore, many accommodation units were constructed on both sides of the reception with a footpath connecting the units with each other as well as with the reception. Lastly, it`s interesting to mention that the green areas and the beach were unchanged. Nevertheless, the eastern area of the island was not properly used as before. To conclude, it is noticeable that the island changed to a complete and beautiful touristic place that had many available facilities.

Firstly
, it can be clearly
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seen
 that the vast majority of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 was almost unused. Since it has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 beach on its western part and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 trees planted on both sides of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
. However
, the central zone of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
 was merely
 free.

On the other hand
. Numerous facilities were built
 later. This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withreactiongatheringwelcomegreetingreceivingmeeting
reception
was constructed
 in the heart of the central region. This You use this word too often, consider replacing it withreactiongatheringwelcomegreetingreceivingmeeting
reception
was connected
 to a restaurant in the northern You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 and the pier in the Southern part by a car truck. In addition
, this pier was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 for boat trips. Furthermore
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 accommodation units were constructed
 on both sides of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withreactiongatheringwelcomegreetingreceivingmeeting
reception
 with a footpath connecting the units with each other Probable usage error. Use "and" after 'both'.and
as well as
 with the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withreactiongatheringwelcomegreetingreceivingmeeting
reception
. Lastly
, You used an accent character instead of an apostrophe. Please use either "it's" or "it’s".it'sit’s
it`s
 interesting to mention that the green You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
areas
 and the beach were unchanged
. Nevertheless
, the eastern You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
 was not properly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 as This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
.

To conclude
, it is noticeable that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpeninsulareefarchipelagoenclaveisletisle
island
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
 to a complete and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :gorgeousstunning
beautiful
 touristic place that had This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 available facilities. 