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The given pie charts illustrate the average distribution of three kinds of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and added sugar) consumed by Americans in everyday meals such as breakfast, lunch, snacks and dinner.

The given pie charts illustrate the average distribution of three kinds of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and added sugar) consumed by Americans in everyday meals such as breakfast, lunch, snacks and dinner. gPg1
The given pie charts illustrate the average distribution of three kinds of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and added sugar) consumed by Americans in everyday meals such as breakfast, lunch, snacks and dinner. Overall, from the 1st chart we can see that sodium consumption is the highest during dinner, with both snacks and breakfast each accounting for the least and equal amounts of sodium intake throughout a normal day. In the next chart, dinner is also the main source of saturated fat for Americans, with snacks and breakfast also accounting for the least, but this time unequal amounts of saturated fat intake. As for the last chart, the situation becomes slightly different. Here, added sugar is mostly ingested during snack times, while breakfast still remains the minor contributor to the nutrient’s everyday use. First of all, Americans usually get most of their sodium (43%) from dinner meals. On the other hand, both breakfast and snacks each provide only 14% of sodium consumed throughout a day. Similarly, we can say that people in the USA fulfill most of their daily saturated fat intake from dinner as well (37%). Breakfast and snacks, however, supply the least percentages, 16% and 21% respectively, of the everyday saturated fat consumption. Finally, added sugar intake is mostly satisfied through eating snacks (42%), instead of dinner (23%), with breakfast again providing the least amount (16%).
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illustrate the average distribution of three kinds of nutrients (sodium,
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saturated
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fat
and
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added
sugar) consumed by Americans in everyday meals such as
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breakfast
, lunch,
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snacks
and dinner.

Overall
, from the 1st
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we can
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that sodium consumption is the highest during
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dinner
, with both
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snacks
and
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breakfast
each accounting for the least and equal amounts of sodium
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intake
throughout a normal day. In the
next
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chart
,
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dinner
is
also
the main source of
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saturated
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fat
for Americans, with
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snacks
and
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breakfast
also
accounting for the least,
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but
this time unequal amounts of
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saturated
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fat
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intake
. As for the last
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, the situation becomes
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. Here,
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sugar is
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times, while
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still
remains the minor contributor to the nutrient’s everyday
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.

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, Americans
usually
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get
most of their sodium (43%) from
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dinner
meals.
On the other hand
, both
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breakfast
and
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snacks
each provide
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14% of sodium consumed throughout a day.

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, we can say that
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people
in the USA fulfill most of their daily
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saturated
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fat
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intake
from
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dinner
as well
(37%).
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Breakfast
and
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snacks
,
however
, supply the least percentages, 16% and 21%
respectively
, of the everyday
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saturated
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fat
consumption.

Finally
,
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added
sugar
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is
mostly
satisfied through eating
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snacks
(42%),
instead
of
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dinner
(23%), with
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breakfast
again providing the least amount (16%).
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IELTS academic The given pie charts illustrate the average distribution of three kinds of nutrients (sodium, saturated fat and added sugar) consumed by Americans in everyday meals such as breakfast, lunch, snacks and dinner.

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