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the chart below shows the total number of minutes in billion ps of telephone calls in Uk divided into three categories from1995 to 2002

the chart below shows the total number of minutes in billion ps of telephone calls in Uk divided into three categories from1995 to 2002 eBmW
The bar chart represents the combined time spent in billions of minutes for 3 types of call including local, national and international, and mobiles in Great Britain from the year 1995 to 2002. Overall, it is noticeable the majority of British spent time on local call the most over 7 years period. In addition, National and International calls are increase gradually while mobiles call are rapidly increasing since 1999. Focusing on local, the data shows that the number of minutes are fluctuated over time since it start with about 70 billions minutes in 1995 and reach the peak at 90 minutes in 1999. However, it steadily decreasing to just over 70 in 2002. Despite those fluctuated changes, local calls still have a highest total minutes among other categories. Turning to National and International calls, it is obvious that it constantly increase over time from the year 1995 and 2002, which is under 40 billions minutes and approximately 60 billions minutes respectively. On the contrary, the mobile usage in the year 1995 is about 5 billions minutes and steadily increase until 1999. Since 2000, it start to rapidly increasing to about 45 billions minutes in 2002.
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local
, national and international, and mobiles in Great Britain from the
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1995 to 2002.

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the most
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7 years period.
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, National and International
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are increase
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, the data
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minutes in 1995 and reach the peak at 90 minutes in 1999.
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70 in 2002. Despite those fluctuated
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local
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1995 and 2002, which is under 40
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minutes and approximately 60
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1995 is about 5
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