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The two maps below show access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. yXPWd
The two maps illustrate the routes to the city hospital  in two different years (2007 and 2010).  Overall, in 2007, the city hospital could be accessed by one road (hospital road) and a T-junction where as in 2010 it was accessed by either going through the bus station, on the west of the hospital road or the hospital road.  There were six bus tops with three on each side of the hospital road in 2007 while in 2010 there was one big bus station on the west of the hospital road connected  to the hospital road with two roundabouts.  The parking area in 2010 was separated for staff and the public, with one on the east side of the hospital road and one on the east of the city hospital respectively, while, in 2007 the car park was reserved for both staff and public and was located on the right side of the hospital road.  In both years the ring road that surrounded the city hospital remained the same.
The two maps illustrate the routes to the city hospital
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, in 2007, the city
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hospital
could
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road
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(hospital
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in 2010 it
was accessed
by either going through the bus station, on the west of the
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hospital
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road
or the
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hospital
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.  There were six bus tops with three on each side of the
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hospital
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road
in 2007 while in 2010 there was one
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big
bus station on the west of the
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hospital
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road
connected
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to the
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hospital
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road
with two roundabouts.  The parking area in 2010
was separated
for staff and the public, with one on the east side of the
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hospital
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road
and one on the east of the city
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hospital
respectively
, while, in 2007 the car park 
was reserved
for both staff and public and
was located
on the right side of the
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hospital
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road
.  In both years the ring
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road
that surrounded the city
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hospital
remained the same.

IELTS academic The two maps below show access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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