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the two map show information about accomodations provided in an island

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The two map figures compare the construction of some facilities provided in 100 meters of space in an island. It can be seen that none of the trees has been cut during the changes. According to the figures, generally, there is lots of accommodation provided in this island after the changes. When we compare the figures, we could see there is a hotel located in the center of the island which contains a reception and lots of rooms on both sides of the island. The rooms are located in a circular shape in the east and west of the reception. Each side contains 8 and 6 rooms respectively. In the north of the reception, there is a restaurant which is exactly located in the north of the island. No changes happened in the east of the island but in contrast in the west of the island, there is a great beach and a great place provided for swimming and in the south of the island, a small pier has been built.
The two map figures compare the construction of
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some
facilities provided in 100 meters of space
The usual preposition for "island" is "on" not "in". Revise: "on an island".
in an island
.

It can be
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seen
that none of the trees has been
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cut
during the
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changes
. According to the figures,
generally
, there is lots of accommodation provided in this
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island
after the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
.

When we compare the figures, we could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
there is a hotel located in the center of the
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island
which contains a reception and lots of rooms on both sides of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
island
. The rooms
are located
in a circular shape in the east and west of the reception. Each side contains 8 and 6 rooms
respectively
. In the north of the reception, there is a restaurant which is exactly located in the north of the island.

No
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changes
happened in the east of the
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island
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but
in contrast
in the west of the
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island
, there is a great beach and a great place provided for swimming and in the south of the
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island
, a
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small
pier has
been built
.
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IELTS academic the two map show information about accomodations provided in an island

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4 paragraphs
171 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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