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The pie chart show the amount of money spent on different factors by two countries in 2005

The pie chart show the amount of money spent on different factors by two countries in 2005 Ydy05

The given pie chart illustrates that how much money(in dollar) is used on different types of subjects -housing, transportation, food, health care and other goods and services in Malaysia and Japan during 2005. As an overall trend, when all the figures are taken into consideration, it can be vividly seen that Japan spent most on other goods and services; however Malaysia did on Housing. Initally, Its very clear when we look at the chrat that Japan is spending most of its money on other goods and services(29%), Whereas for Malaysia its only (26%). Japan and Malaysia expenditure on housing was (21%) and (34%) respectively. Japan consumed (3%) less food then of Malaysia which is (27%). Moreover As we move further we can check that More money was depleted by Japan on Health care (6%) than Malaysia which is (3%). Japan spent double the money on transportation which is 20 percent: howerver Malaysia was 10 percent.

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different
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goods
 and services in Malaysia and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withglazevarnishlacquerstaincoating
Japan
 during 2005.

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Japan
 spent most on other This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
 and services; however
 Malaysia did on Housing.

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Initally
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very
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clear
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Japan
 is spending most of its money on other This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
 and services(29%), Whereas for Malaysia its This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 (26%). You use this word too often, consider replacing it withglazevarnishlacquerstaincoating
Japan
 and Malaysia expenditure on housing was (21%) and (34%) respectively
. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withglazevarnishlacquerstaincoating
Japan
 consumed (3%) less food Did you mean "than"?than
then
 of Malaysia which is (27%).

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Moreover
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move
further
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check
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 by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withglazevarnishlacquerstaincoating
Japan
 on Health care (6%) than Malaysia which is (3%). You use this word too often, consider replacing it withglazevarnishlacquerstaincoating
Japan
 spent double the money on transportation which is 20 percent: Possible spelling mistake found.however
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 Malaysia was 10 percent. 