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the two map below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. make comparison

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Given are two maps illustrating a transformation of road accessibility to a city hospital in two years. It is evident from the information supplied that significant modifications to access hospitals had developed. These development include car parking, roundabouts, and a new bus station. As shown by the map in 2007, city dwellers accessed to hospital from city road to hospital road. Meanwhile, there was three bus stop in both sides of the hospital road. Moreover, a car park on the east side of hospital road was for both staff and public. Regarding the significant changes in 2010, it can be seen that two roundabouts were built on each side of hospital road with the intersection of ring road and city road. It is noticeable that a new car park was constructed on the east side of the ring road, which was separated staff parking from the public. Also, notewrothy is that a new bus station was erected on the west side of hospital road instead of bus stops.
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Given
are two maps illustrating a transformation of
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road
accessibility to a city
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hospital
in two years.

It is evident from the information supplied that significant modifications to access
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hospitals
had developed.
Did you mean "this development" or "These developments"?
These development
include car parking, roundabouts, and a new bus station.

As shown by the map in 2007, city dwellers accessed to
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hospital
from city
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road
to
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hospital
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road
. Meanwhile, there was three bus
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stop
in both
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sides
of the
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hospital
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road
.
Moreover
, a car park on the east side of
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hospital
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road
was for both staff and public.

Regarding the significant
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changes
in 2010, it can be
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seen
that two roundabouts
were built
on each side of
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hospital
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road
with the intersection of ring
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road
and city
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road
. It is noticeable that a new car park
was constructed
on the east side of the ring
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road
, which
was separated
staff parking from the public.
Also
,
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notewrothy
is that a new bus station
was erected
on the west side of
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hospital
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road
instead
of bus
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stops
.
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IELTS academic the two map below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. make comparison

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6.0
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