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The two line graph shows the average of daily hour of sunshine and the average of temperature in drawin and melbourne.

The two line graph shows the average of daily hour of sunshine and the average of temperature in drawin and melbourne. mbQbN
The assigned line graph illustrate the average of daily hours of sunshine and second line graph dipicts the average of temperature in Drawin and MelbourneIt is manifest that, in January, the sun shine for 10 hours in Drawin but in Melbourne only for 6 hours. In the next month, there were 6 hours when sun appears in Drawin but the figure of Melbourne was inclined continuously and reach at 12 hours but in October, it was declined to nearly 8 hours. In Drawin 8 hours sunshine in July month and in the September, it reached at 10 hours. In december, 12 hours sunshine for 12 hours in Drawin. The temperature of drawin was 25°c in the first month but in March it was inclined and again fell down in July after that this figure was stable at same place from September to december that was 35°c. In Melbourne, the temperature was 15°c in first month then in april it was 25°c but it was fell down in may. In the September month this figure again increase and reached at 30°c. Overall, it is crystal clear that, the figure of daily hours for sunshine and temperature was maximum in Drawin rather than Melbourne.
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Drawin
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that was 35°c. In Melbourne, the
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again increase and reached at 30°c.
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