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The two layouts illustrated what the park looked like in 1980 and present day. As it can be seen in the two layouts, the park has been renovated in the past 30 years with the similar size.

The two layouts illustrated what the park looked like in 1980 and present day. As it can be seen in the two layouts, the park has been renovated in the past 30 years with the similar size. ljqMW
The two layouts illustrated what the park looked like in 1980 and present day. As it can be seen in the two layouts, the park has been renovated in the past 30 years with the similar size. A close look at the layouts revealed that the previous pathway running from the northwest corner to the southeast one of the part was demolished and new one that leads to four sides of the park was constructed after 1980. The grass field had been separated into four regions by the new path in each corner of the park. The trees in the northeast corner had been dislodged and two wood tables with benches were added in the same place which provided facilities for picnic. Some trees were planted along the edge of the path on the south side of the picnic region. The small pond remained in the same place but one of four benches was removed. The flowerbeds were demolished as well and provided more fields for children to play. The fences in the south entrance and the walls along all edges of the park had been removed. Overall, the park has been renovated into a one without walls and provide full access for the public during the past 30 years
The two layouts illustrated what the
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park
looked like in 1980 and present day. As it can be
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seen
in the two layouts, the
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park
has
been renovated
in the past 30 years with the similar size.

A close look at the layouts revealed that the previous pathway running from the northwest corner to the southeast one of the part
was demolished
and new one that leads to four sides of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
was constructed
after 1980. The grass field had
been separated
into four regions by the new path in each corner of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
. The trees in the northeast corner had
been dislodged
and two wood tables with benches were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
in the same place which provided facilities for picnic.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
trees
were planted
along the edge of the path on the south side of the picnic region. The
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small
pond remained in the same place
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but
one of four benches
was removed
. The flowerbeds
were demolished
as well
and provided more fields for children to play.
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The
fences in the south entrance and the walls along all edges of the
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park
had
been removed
.

Overall
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
has
been renovated
into a one without walls and provide full access for the public during the past 30 years
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IELTS academic The two layouts illustrated what the park looked like in 1980 and present day. As it can be seen in the two layouts, the park has been renovated in the past 30 years with the similar size.

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