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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

The graphs compare data about 5 main sources of produced energy in USA in 1980 and 1990. Overall, it is clear that, in both years, oil maintained dominance in energy generation, while h/power and coal constituted the least part of it. Turning to the details, being 26% in 1980, the amount of energy produced from natural gas experienced a slight decline by 1% in 1990. Similarly, having the most proportion in energy generation in 1980 comprising for 42%, oil segment decreased remarkably to 33% in 1990. Meanwhile, the amount of energy generated from h/power stood at the same level in both years making up 5%. On the other hand, being just under a quarter in 1980, coal segment witnessed a remarkable increase to 27% in 1990. Similarly, having the same proportion with h/power in energy production in 1980 constituting for 5% nuclear power doubled in 1990.
The graphs compare data about 5 main sources of produced
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in 1980 and 1990.

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that, in both years, oil maintained dominance in
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generation, while h/power and coal constituted the least part of it.

Turning to the
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, being 26% in 1980, the amount of
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energy
produced from natural gas experienced a slight decline by 1% in 1990.
Similarly
, having the most proportion in
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energy
generation in 1980 comprising for 42%, oil segment decreased
remarkably
to 33% in 1990. Meanwhile, the amount of
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energy
generated from h/power stood at the same level in both years making up 5%.

On the other hand
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under a quarter in 1980, coal segment witnessed a remarkable increase to 27% in 1990.
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, having the same proportion with h/power in
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production in 1980 constituting for 5% nuclear power doubled in 1990.
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IELTS academic The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

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