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the total of Japanese who go to a board for tourism and the percentage of Australian in Japan’s tourist market from 1985 to 1995 rise. Do you agree or disagree

the total of Japanese who go to a board for tourism and the percentage of Australian in Japan’s tourist market from 1985 to 1995 rise. 9LBO7

The supplied charts depict the quantity of Japanese people who tends to travel oversea over the period of 10 years commencing from 1985 and Australia's stocks of Japan’s tourist market As can be seen clearly, there were an upward trend in both the number of Japanese's traveling aboard Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market between 1985 and 1994 To begin with the total of tourists aboard in japan hovered around 5 million in 1985. Moreover, it was a significant increase to roughly 11 million after 5 years. However, the number of Japanese tourists traveling aboard witnessed a slow decrease by 1 million in the next year followed by a sharp rise up again in the next four years and reached a highest peak of nearly 16 million in 1995 On the other hand, the percentage of Australia of stock in japan experienced a dramatic growth from 2% to approximately 6% over the period of 8 years beginning from 1985 although decreasing slightly to 4% in 1989. In contrast Australia's share saw a slow fall by 0. 2% at the end of the period.

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