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The total number of minutes (in billions) of three types of telephone calls for the 7-year period in UK has illustrated with the bar graph.

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The total number of minutes (in billions) of three types of telephone calls for the 7-year period in UK has illustrated with the bar graph. Overall, the number of minutes of all mobile calls speedily increased while local-fixed line calls fluctuated and national and international fixed line class raised slightly during the given time. Starting from the year 1995 with 70 billion minutes, through a gradual increase local-fixed line call hitted its peak at 90 billion minutes. Then it decreased continuously and by 2002 reached at the same value of its beginning point. A slight upsurge was observed for the national and international-fixed line call where the total number of minutes changed from around above 35 to 60 billion minutes within time limit of 7 years. To begin with above zero minutes, sum of minutes of mobile calls increased rapidly just above zero to around 45 billion minutes in 7 years.
The total number of minutes (in
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of three types of telephone
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calls
for the 7-year period in UK has illustrated with the bar graph.

Overall
, the number of minutes of all mobile
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calls
speedily
increased while local-
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fixed
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line
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calls
fluctuated and national and international
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fixed
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line
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class
raised
slightly
during the
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given
time.

Starting from the year 1995 with 70
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billion
minutes, through a gradual increase local-
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fixed
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line
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call
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hitted
its peak at 90
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billion
minutes. Then it decreased
continuously
and by 2002 reached at the same value of its beginning point.

A slight upsurge
was observed
for the national and international-
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fixed
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line
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call
where the total number of minutes
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changed
from around above 35 to 60
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billion
minutes within time limit of 7 years.

To
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begin
with above zero minutes, sum of minutes of mobile
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calls
increased
rapidly
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above zero to around 45
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billion
minutes in 7 years.

IELTS academic The total number of minutes (in billions) of three types of telephone calls for the 7-year period in UK has illustrated with the bar graph.

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