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the three various countries in term of the number of population age 65 and over in six different years with twenty years interval, starting from 1940.

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The given line graph compare the three various countries in term of the number of population age 65 and over in six different years with twenty years interval, starting from 1940. The general over view here is that all countries were considerable increase in the number of people age 65 and over over the centenary period. As it can be seen from the graph, in 1940, Japan has exactly 5 per cent of people in age 65 and over, While the USA and Sweden have around almost 10 percent and approximately 7 percent of the total percentage, Over the following 40 years, the figure of elderly people in the USA and Sweden rose by around 6 per cent, on the contrary the number of Japan’s elderly people fell slightly by 2 percent. From late of 1990 to 2020, there were steady increase of the aged by around 5 per cent in Sweden and Japan. By contrast, the USA saw a mere decrease in the amount of elderly population of approximately 1 per cent over the same period. it is vital to note that there were a significant moment in all three countries. Over the projected period of a decade between 2030 to 2040, Japan is expected to has a greatest amount of senior citizen by merely over 25 per cent, Whereas the respective figure of senior citizen in the USA and Sweden are expected to rise to around 18 per cent and exactly 20 per cent.
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IELTS academic the three various countries in term of the number of population age 65 and over in six different years with twenty years interval, starting from 1940.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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