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The three pie charts shows the total spending of school in 1981,1991and 2001.

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The three pie charts depict the information about the amount spent by school during the years 1981, 1991 and 2001. The data has been calibrated in the form of percentum. It is crystal clear that most of the amount is spent on tutor salaries in all the three years. That is, 40%, 50% and 45% in 1981, 1991 and 2001, respectively. Whereas, the least money is spent on insurance in all the given years as it was 2%, 3% and 8% in 1981, 1991 and 2001, respectively. Considering the rest of the information, the percentage decreased from 1981 to 2001 in other workers salaries. A decrease from 28% to 22% in 1981 and 1991, respectively. Whereas, in 2001 it was remained just 15%. Besides this, expenditure spent on furniture and equipment was 15% in initial years and it was 5% in 1991. However, the percentage increase from 5% to 23% in 2001 and 15% of the amount was spent on resources in 1981. While, 9% in 2001. Hence, the maximum expenditure was spent on teachers salary in all the years.
The three pie charts depict the information about the amount
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spent
by school during the years 1981, 1991 and 2001. The data has
been calibrated
in the form of
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percentum
.

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that most of the amount is
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spent
on tutor salaries in all the three years.
That is
, 40%, 50% and 45% in 1981, 1991 and 2001,
respectively
. Whereas, the least money is
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spent
on insurance in all the
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years as it was 2%, 3% and 8% in 1981, 1991 and 2001,
respectively
.

Considering the rest of the information, the percentage decreased from 1981 to 2001 in other workers salaries. A decrease from 28% to 22% in 1981 and 1991,
respectively
.
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, in 2001 it
was remained
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15%.
Besides
this, expenditure
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spent
on furniture and equipment was 15% in initial years and it was 5% in 1991.
However
, the percentage increase from 5% to 23% in 2001 and 15% of the amount was
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spent
on resources in 1981. While, 9% in 2001.

Hence
, the maximum expenditure was
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on
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teachers
salary in all the years.
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