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The three pie charts depict the annual spending in a school in the United Kingdom in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

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The three pie charts depict the annual spending in a school in the United Kingdom in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Overall, in the year 1981, the highest amount spent was on teacher’s salaries by 40% followed by 28% on other worker’s salaries. The percentage spent on equipment, furniture and books was 15% each. The least spending was on insurance by 2%. After ten years, in 1991 the diagrams show 50% were paid as teaching staff salaries while 22% were paid as non-teaching staff salaries. Furthermore, 20% was spending was on books and other resources whereas 5% on furniture and equipment and only 3% on insurance. Finally, in 2001, money spent on insurance was increased to 8% however, salaries given to teachers and other staff were 45% and 15% respectively On the contrary 9% was spent on resources like books and stationery and 23% on furniture and equipment.
The three pie charts depict the annual spending in a school in the United Kingdom in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

Overall
, in the year 1981, the highest amount
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spent
was on teacher’s
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salaries
by 40% followed by 28% on other worker’s
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salaries
. The percentage
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spent
on equipment, furniture and books was 15% each. The least spending was on insurance by 2%. After ten years, in 1991 the diagrams
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50%
were paid
as teaching staff
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salaries
while 22%
were paid
as non-teaching staff
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salaries
.
Furthermore
, 20% was spending was on books and other resources whereas 5% on furniture and equipment and
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only
3% on insurance.
Finally
, in 2001, money
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spent
on insurance
was increased
to 8%
however
,
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salaries
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given
to teachers and other staff were 45% and 15%
respectively
On the contrary
9% was
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spent
on resources like books and stationery and 23% on furniture and equipment.

IELTS academic The three pie charts depict the annual spending in a school in the United Kingdom in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

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