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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. 0q1Q
The total spending of any buildings is statistical data, which helps to understand and improve many problems. Overall, teachers’ salaries has some hesitation. From the given years spending for addition resources is only decreasing. Teachers’ salaries firstly having an increase by 10% in 1991, but after ten years decreasing to the half of following increase and spending only 45% from all of outcomes. The same and unstable situation with school’s spending for facilities like: furniture and equipment. Firstly it decreased thirdly from 1981, after that in 2001 the school spot nearly 25% of full outcome. Spends for other school workers has totally fall in the all of given period. In particular, from 1981 till 2001, school’s spend for staff decreased from 28% to 9%. Most insignificant school spending is for insurance which always consist less than 10%, in contrast progressing from 2% till 8% of all school outcomes.
The total
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of any buildings is statistical data, which
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, teachers’ salaries has
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hesitation. From the
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years
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spending
for addition resources is
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decreasing.

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firstly
having an increase by 10% in 1991,
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after ten years decreasing to the half of following increase and
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spending
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only
45% from
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all of outcomes
. The same and unstable situation with
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school’s
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spending
for facilities like: furniture and equipment.
Firstly
it decreased
thirdly
from 1981, after that in 2001 the
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school
spot
nearly
25% of full outcome.

Spends for other
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school
workers has
totally
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fall
in the all of
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period.
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,
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from 1981 till 2001
,
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school’s
spend for staff decreased from 28% to 9%. Most insignificant
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school
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is for insurance which always consist less than 10%,
in contrast
progressing from 2% till 8% of all
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school
outcomes.

IELTS academic The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

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