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The three graphs depicts the types of music albums sold to UK categorized by their gender and age. Overall, any type of music has more popularity in men than in women. For people age 45+ Classical Music is mostly chosen while young adults prefer Rock Music and Pop Music. In the first graph it shows men tend to buy pop music around 28% and women like 19%. It also shows in the second graph were men has 27% and women only by 18% for the rock music and only 9% and 7% in men and women respectively.
The three graphs depicts the types of
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music
albums sold to UK categorized by their gender and age.

Overall
, any type of
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music
has more popularity in
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men
than in
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women
. For
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people
age 45+ Classical
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Music
is
mostly
chosen while young adults prefer Rock
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Music
and Pop Music.

In the
first
graph it
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shows
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men
tend to
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buy
pop
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music
around 28% and
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women
like 19%. It
also
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shows
in the second graph were
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men
has 27% and
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women
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only
by 18% for the rock
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music
and
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only
9% and 7% in
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men
and
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women
respectively
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IELTS academic The three graphs provide an overview of the types of music people purchase in the

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