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“Each year, 13 boxers on average die in the ring ! ( Source : CNN ). These deaths are completely avoidable, if a complete ban on combat sports was implemented. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and Include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

“Each year, 13 boxers on average die in the ring! ( Source: CNN ). These deaths are completely avoidable, if a complete ban on combat sports was implemented. xxQy6

In the given statement the presented argument is that combat sports ought to be strictly prohibited as those can cause death among the participants. Obviously, a plethora of justifications can be found in favor and against this stand, but I am more inclined to disagree with it. To begin with, banning combat sports is not the answer, instead, the authority should make sure that the arenas and venues hosting those events are doing so maintaining the required safety standards. Risk is always involved with every kind of sporting activity and the instances are not rare to find when the players got injured while taking part in a sport that is considered safe. What's more, people can seriously hurt themselves while executing the most mundane duties of life like crossing a road or cooking a meal. Surely, the sensible course of action would not be to ban sports in general or abstain from walking or cooking, but to take adequate safety measures. It goes without saying, the government should not have the power to dictate which game is for the citizens to take part in, and an individual should have the freedom to engage in a rather dangerous activity without the undue interferences of the authority. Not to mention, thousands of people, including the players depend on those games to earn a living; thus, a complete ban would leave them jobless. On the other hand, an argument can be made that it is the responsibility of the government to make sure that the citizens are safe and as sports like boxing or wrestling can get deadly not only for the participants but also for the spectators, those ought to be banned. Some might even suggest people who enjoy those games should turn their attention to other safer activities. Except, safety precautions would be enough to maintain public safety, and we can not expect people to be monolithic in their choices. To sum up. I am convinced, in order to curb the number of fatalities, instead of banning the more practical and effective measure would be to impose safety measures and regulations.

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