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The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented in three forms.

The line chart shows some viewing information about cost for the pie charts while shows percentage of outline change in the market in three difference shape in watching movies. Overall, at the line chart, it is clear that cinema tickets have the highest cost and DVD while have legal download fewer than cost of cinema thicket, rent a DVD although more popular than went to cinema and surfing the internet to downloaded movies. It’s clear cinema ticket the most expensive that was starting up the 8$ in 2005, that was increased significantly limit of 14$ in 2011, in 2005 the attention to went to cinema was more than in2011. The cost for DVD cheaper than other shapes. the percentage of cost went up approximately 6$ in 2005 to 8$ in 2011. And it had most popular among the people in the both of years, In finally legal download was going up almost 8$ after 3 years had in addition increase moderately reached nearly 8. 5$ in 2007 but was dropping significantly about 6$ in much more than 2005.
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shows
percentage of outline
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in the market in three difference shape in watching movies.

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cinema
tickets have the highest
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and DVD while have legal download fewer than
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cost
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cinema
thicket, rent a DVD although more popular than went to
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cinema
and surfing the internet to downloaded movies.

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ticket the most expensive that was starting up the
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8$
in 2005, that
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significantly
limit of
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in 2011, in 2005 the attention to went to
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was more than in2011. The
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for DVD cheaper than other shapes.
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went up approximately
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in 2005 to
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in 2011. And it had most popular among the
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented in three forms.

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3 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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