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The tables illustrate the data on temperature and hours of daytime in Mumbai, India, and Moscow, Russia during a week in May 2003

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The tables illustrate the data on temperature and hours of daytime in Mumbai, India, and Moscow, Russia during a week in May 2003 It is clear that the quantity of temperature in Mumbai was higher than that of temperature in Moscow. In addition, the rate of sunrise in Mumbai was later than the figure of sunrise in Moscow however in Mumbai the hour of sunset was early than the hour of sunset in Moscow. As far as the temperature, the highest temperature of the day in Mumbai with 34 degrees Celcius on Saturday meanwhile the fever in Moscow Highest temperature of the day at 17 degrees Celcius on Sunday. The rate of Mumbai was threefold as high as that of Moscow. The highest temperatures on Friday and Sunday were roughly equal to 33 degrees Celcius and the lowest was 29 degrees in 3 days meanwhile the rate of temperature in Moscow on the lowest was 2 degrees Celcius. According to the hours of daytime, the sunrise was about 6. 00 in Mumbai but the sunrise in Moscow was 4. 52 which was sooner than in Mumbai. Furthermore, Sunrise and sunset times in Mumbai and Moscow were stable. The hour of daytime in Mumbai was about 13 hours meanwhile that was 17 hours in Moscow.
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of daytime in Mumbai, India, and Moscow, Russia during a week in May 2003

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that the quantity of
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in Mumbai was higher than that of
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in Moscow.
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of sunset was early than the
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of sunset in Moscow.

As far as the
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, the highest
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of the day in Mumbai with 34
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on Saturday meanwhile the fever in Moscow Highest
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of the day at 17
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on Sunday. The rate of Mumbai was threefold as high as that of Moscow. The highest
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on Friday and Sunday were roughly equal to 33
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and the lowest was 29
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in 3 days meanwhile the rate of
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in Moscow on the lowest was 2
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of daytime, the sunrise was about 6. 00 in Mumbai
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the sunrise in Moscow was 4. 52 which was sooner than in Mumbai.
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of daytime in Mumbai was about 13
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meanwhile that was 17
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in Moscow.
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