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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people who were over 60 years old in Canada,Finland and Korea from 1950 to 2050.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people who were over 60 years old in Canada, Finland and Korea from 1950 to 2050. JwBAD
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people who were over 60 years old in Canada, Finland and Korea from 1950 to 2050. Overall, it is crystal clear that the percentage of 60-year-old citizens of Finland was the highest while Korea had the youngest population at the beginning. In addition, aged population of three nations increased significantly in the period of time. In 1950, the rate of resident aged over 60 in Finland was the highest which was roughly twice greater than that of Korea, with its value was nearly 10%. It rose dramatically by about 11% from 1980 to 2020 and the age population of Finland is predicted to reach nearly 25% in 2050. Meanwhile, from 1950 to 1980, the rate of 60-year-old people in Canada increased dramatically and tended to remain unchanged until 2000. After the year 2000, the aged population of this country rose sharply and it is predicted to reach roughly 25% in 2050. An opposite trend was seen in the old population of Korea from 1950 to 1970. However, it went up enormously and in 2050, the percentage of age citizen of this nation will rank first with 30%.
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who were over 60 years
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old
in Canada, Finland and Korea from 1950 to 2050.

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clear
that the percentage of 60-year-
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old
citizens of Finland was the highest while Korea had the youngest
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population
at the beginning.
In addition
, aged
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population
of three nations increased
significantly
in the period of time.

In 1950, the rate of resident aged over 60 in Finland was the highest which was roughly twice greater than that of Korea, with its value was
nearly
10%. It rose
dramatically
by about 11% from 1980 to 2020 and the age
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population
of Finland
is predicted
to reach
nearly
25% in 2050.

Meanwhile, from 1950 to 1980, the rate of 60-year-
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old
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people
in Canada increased
dramatically
and tended to remain unchanged until 2000. After the year 2000, the aged
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population
of this country rose
sharply
and it
is predicted
to reach roughly 25% in 2050. An opposite trend was
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seen
in the
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old
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population
of Korea from 1950 to 1970.
However
, it went up
enormously
and in 2050, the percentage of age citizen of this nation will rank
first
with 30%.
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IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the proportion of people who were over 60 years old in Canada, Finland and Korea from 1950 to 2050.

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