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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Q1LL
The tabular chart shows the proportion of students attending four different types of secondary school during the period of nine years. The data is calibrated in percentage. Overall, it is quite evident that out of four types of schools, the attendance of students in three schools showed negative trend while community school revealed positive trend over the given years. It is clear from the graph, the majority of students were seen in community schools in 2009 with 58% while the least number of students found in specialist schools in the same year at 10%. The eye catching point of the chart, there was meager change in specialist school student’s attendance; their attendance remained near about one-tenth in all the three years. The note worthy point, the student attendance in grammar school showed negative trend as, attendance decreased to its half in the end from 24% in 2000 to 12% in 2009. Voluntary controlled school was the most popular school with the second highest attendance in school in initial year however; it declined from 52% to 20% in the end.
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different
types of secondary
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during the period of nine years. The data
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in percentage.

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, it is quite evident that out of four types of
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schools
, the
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attendance
of
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in three
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schools
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showed
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negative
trend while community
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school
revealed
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positive
trend over the
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given
years.

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clear
from the graph, the majority of
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students
were
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seen
in community
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schools
in 2009 with 58% while the least number of
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found in specialist
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schools
in the same
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year
at 10%. The
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point of the chart, there was meager
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in specialist
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school
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student’s
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attendance
; their
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remained near about one-tenth in all the three years. The
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point, the
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student
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attendance
in grammar
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school
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showed
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negative
trend as,
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attendance
decreased to its half in the
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end
from 24% in 2000 to 12% in 2009. Voluntary controlled
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school
was the most popular
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with the second highest
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attendance
in
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in initial
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however
; it declined from 52% to 20% in the
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