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The table shows the percentage of women in senior management positions in three companies from 1975 to 2015.

The table shows the percentage of women in senior management positions in three companies from 1975 to 2015. Eq7VQ
While more women were in senior positions at Finsbury Ltd than the other two companies in 1975 at 16%, the trend was fairly erratic with a 2% drop to 14% in 1980, followed by a rise of 1% five years later. In 1990, women held 7% more top management jobs than in 1985. After a slight drop back to 20% in 2000, by 2015 26% of top posts were filled by women. By contrast, at Eldan Ltd women fared much better. In 1975, 3% of senior posts were occupied by women with no change five years on. By 1985, the figure had increased to 14%, doubling to 28% in 1990. Ten years afterwards, there was a 5% increase in female senior management jobs with a near twofold jump in 2015 to stand at 64%, the highest for the three companies. The situation was less remarkable at Bamforth Ltd than the other two firms except for the year 2015. In 1975, the percentage of senior posts held by women was 9% climbing at the rate of 2% in each subsequent period until 2000, after which it leapt to 46%. From the data, it is clear that women dominated senior posts at Eldan by 2015.
While more
women
were in
senior
positions at
Finsbury
Ltd than the other two
companies
in 1975 at 16%, the trend was
fairly
erratic with a 2% drop to 14% in 1980, followed by a rise of 1% five years later. In 1990,
women
held 7% more top management jobs than in 1985. After a slight drop back to 20% in 2000, by 2015 26% of top
posts
were filled
by women.

By contrast, at
Eldan
Ltd
women
fared much better. In 1975, 3% of
senior
posts
were occupied
by
women
with no
change
five years on. By 1985, the figure had increased to 14%, doubling to 28% in 1990. Ten years afterwards, there was a 5% increase in female
senior
management jobs with a near twofold jump in 2015 to stand at 64%, the highest for the three
companies
.

The situation was less remarkable at
Bamforth
Ltd than the other two firms
except for
the
year
2015. In 1975, the percentage of
senior
posts
held by
women
was 9% climbing at the rate of 2% in each subsequent period until 2000, after which it leapt to 46%.

From the data, it is
clear
that
women
dominated
senior
posts
at
Eldan
by 2015.
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IELTS academic The table shows the percentage of women in senior management positions in three companies from 1975 to 2015.

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