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The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time.

The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time. Pa3B
The line graph compares the number of passengers who pass London Underground Station bewteen 6. 00 am and 22. 00 pm. Overall, most of people are in the London Underground Station around 7. 30am, while the least number of commuters happens at 6. 00am and 16. 00pm. In detail, the number of passengers was just at 100 at 6. 00am, increasing sharply to the peak, at 400, before it dropped abruptly to just under at 200 at 10. 00am. The time from then until 14. 00pm saw a noticeable rise in the number of commuters, reaching to 300, followed by a significantly fall, back to the least number of passengers at 100 at 16. 00pm. Subsequently, the second peak time took place in the London Underground Station at around 18. 30pm, with over 350 passengers. However, the number of travellers fell gradually, declining to 300 and nearly 120, at 19. 00pm and 20. 00pm, respectively. Furthermore, there was a minimal increase before the number of passengers in London Underground Station dropped back to just under 150.
The line graph compares the
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bewteen
6. 00 am and 22. 00 pm.

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, most of
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are in the London
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around 7. 30am, while the least
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of commuters happens at 6. 00am and 16. 00pm.

In detail, the
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was
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at 100 at 6. 00am, increasing
sharply
to the peak, at 400,
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it dropped
abruptly
to
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under at 200 at 10. 00am. The time from then until 14. 00pm
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saw
a noticeable rise in the
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of commuters, reaching to 300, followed by a
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significantly fall
, back to the least
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at 100 at 16. 00pm.

Subsequently
, the second peak time took place in the London
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at around 18. 30pm, with over 350
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passengers
.
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, the
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travellers
fell
gradually
, declining to 300 and
nearly
120, at 19. 00pm and 20. 00pm,
respectively
.
Furthermore
, there was a minimal increase
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the
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in London
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dropped back to
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under 150.
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IELTS academic The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time.

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