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The table shows the numbers if international students from four areas of world who came to study at University level in a western countries in 2000 and 2005

The table shows the numbers if international students from four areas of world who came to study at University level in a western countries in 2000 and 2005 9QEXj
The table illustrates the amount of fellows joining higher educations at university level in western countries from four different areas of the world in the time of 2000 and 2005. Overall, from China, India, Japan and Brazil huge number of students coming to western countries. In 2000 most of them are from China and least from Brazil. Particularly, in the year of 2000 large amount of them were migrated to western countries are from China is clearly of 35000 l, it covers more than half the total if 58000 in that year. The next more of them are from India is 15000. While, Japan its only 6000 and least are from brazil 2000. In contrast, the year of 2005, most of 22000 are from of same like in 2000 and this year also this country posses first place in the numbers of foreign students likely to take higher education in western countries is China. Indians like more than in previous year range slightly rise a bit of 15000 to 16000 in this time. While Brazilians rate increases 4 times than in 2000 is about to 8000, Japan shows the least of 4000.
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