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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in Finland and Sweeden from 2011 to 2015.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in Finland and Sweeden from 2011 to 2015. pLN03
The given diagram demonstrates the proportion of breaking up in 2 European countries: Finland, Sweeden during 4 years. Overall, Sweden experienced a downward trend while Finland indicated an upward trend despite numerous fluctuations throughout the period. Even though, Finland previously had a lower rate, and, surpassed Sweden at the end. In 2011, the divorce rate in Sweden reached the highest point of 45%, whereas nearly 37% of divorced people in Finland. Over the next year, the percentage of breaking up in Sweden peaked at 49% whilst the divorce rate in Finland dipped notably, falling by approximately 32% in the following year. Surprisingly, there were significant changes in the next 3 years, the year 2013 witnessed a growth of approximately 5% of people divorcing in this nation. The distance was shortened. Consequently, Sweden shrinks consistently. In contrast, Finland increased continuously and also surpassed Sweeden in 2015.
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Sweeden
during 4 years.
Overall
, Sweden experienced a downward trend while Finland indicated an upward trend despite numerous fluctuations throughout the period.
Even though
, Finland previously had a lower rate, and, surpassed Sweden at the
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end
.

In 2011, the divorce rate in Sweden reached the highest point of 45%, whereas
nearly
37% of divorced
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people
in Finland. Over the
next
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year
, the percentage of breaking up in Sweden peaked at 49% whilst the divorce rate in Finland dipped
notably
, falling by approximately 32% in the following
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year
.
Surprisingly
, there were significant
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changes
in the
next
3 years, the
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year
2013 witnessed a growth of approximately 5% of
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people
divorcing in this nation. The distance
was shortened
.
Consequently
, Sweden shrinks
consistently
.
In contrast
, Finland increased
continuously
and
also
surpassed
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Sweeden
in 2015.
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