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The number of new graduates and their employment in the UK from 1992 to 2002.

The number of new graduates and their employment in the UK from 1992 to 2002. 2rEW6
The line graph and bar graph depict the number of new graduates and their employment status between 1992 to 2002. Overall, that chart depicts that a lot of students graduated in 1997 as compared to 1992, but this number reduced by 2002. Moreover, these fresh graduates showed more interest in professional jobs as compared to the other. In the line graph, 165 thousand students graduated from college in 1992. By 1997 this number increased to 195 thousand. But in 2002 there was a sharp decline in the number of graduates, as the number was reduced to 180 thousand. In the bar graph, the professional job category remained high in demand by these graduates in all the three years. But by 2002 the demand in this category reduced by 10%. In contrast clerical and secretarial jobs saw a steady increase. In 1992, only 9% of graduates showed interest in this field but this number increased to 20% by 2002. While in the managerial and administrative field and other field graduates showed almost similar interest in 2002 as they showed in 1992 and 1997. Although no graduates showed interest in the sales field in1992, this figure went up by 10% in 2002
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and bar
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depict the
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number
of new
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graduates
and their employment status

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, that chart depicts that
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a lot of
students graduated in 1997 as compared to 1992,
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this

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number
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reduced
by 2002.
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, these fresh
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graduates
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showed
more interest in professional

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jobs
as compared to the other.

In the line
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graph
, 165 thousand students graduated from college in 1992. By 1997 this
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number


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increased
to 195 thousand.
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But
in 2002 there was a sharp decline in the
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number
of
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graduates
,
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as


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the
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number
was
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reduced
to 180 thousand.

In the bar
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, the professional job category remained high in demand by these
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graduates
in

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all
the three years.
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by 2002 the demand in this category
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reduced
by 10%. In
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contrast


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clerical
and secretarial jobs
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saw
a steady increase. In 1992,
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only
9% of
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graduates
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showed


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interest
in this
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field
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this
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increased to 20% by 2002. While in the managerial
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and


administrative
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field
and other
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field
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graduates
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showed
almost similar interest in 2002 as they

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showed
in 1992 and 1997. Although no
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graduates
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showed
interest in the sales
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field
in1992,
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this


figure went up by 10% in 2002
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IELTS academic The number of new graduates and their employment in the UK from 1992 to 2002.

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