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The table shows the expenses per week of a retired person and a couple in Australia

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The given table illustrates that the expenses of single person and a couple for per week in Australia Overall, from the first glance it can be observed that the highest percentage for single person and double people is housing but the lowest point shopping When it comes to Housing and Other things the rates were 160 and 177 respectively. And other rates which was shopping, food, clothing, shelter, health comprised lower point than the first two rates which I have written. These numbers show that shopping(35), food(55), clothing(67), shelter(92), and health(64). These rates comprised the total amount of single human retired. Turing to the couple people retired. In this section also Housing and Other things rates take a leader which is 284 and 223 dollars per week. Also Clothinh and Shelter percentage followed to higher point, this aspect of a couple retired people contain 120$ and 110$. Shopping Food, and Health note the bottom spot 50, 70 and 77 weekly The total amount is made up of 934$ for double people
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table illustrates that the expenses of single person and a couple for per week in Australia

Overall
, from the
first
glance it can
be observed
that the highest percentage for single person and double
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people
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is
housing
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but
the lowest point shopping

When it
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comes
to Housing and Other things the
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rates
were 160 and 177
respectively
. And other
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rates
which was shopping, food, clothing, shelter, health comprised lower point than the
first
two
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rates
which I have written. These numbers
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show
that shopping(35), food(55), clothing(67), shelter(92), and health(64). These
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rates
comprised the total amount of single human retired.

Turing to the couple
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people
retired. In this section
also
Housing and Other things
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rates
take a leader which is 284 and 223 dollars per week.
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Also
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Clothinh
and Shelter percentage followed to higher point, this aspect of a couple retired
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people
contain
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120$
and
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$110".
110$
. Shopping Food, and Health note the bottom spot 50, 70 and 77 weekly The total amount
is made
up of
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$934".
934$
for double
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people
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IELTS academic The table shows the expenses per week of a retired person and a couple in Australia

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170 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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