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The table shows number of people that remain undernourished around the world from 2000 to 2009

The table shows number of people that remain undernourished around the world from 2000 to 2009 pKeBD
The presented table delineate the individual that remain straved in the world wide between 2000 to 2009, whereas the pie chart depicts the price of rice and wheat in the same year all around the world Overall, it is explicit from the table that the high level of undernourished masses from first year till final year increased significantly. On the other hand, price of rice and wheat were same in the initial year but with some certain fluctuations the rate of wheat increased over the given period. It can be inferred from the table that in year 2000 number of undernourished masses were 857 and in next two years figure increased with five millions. In addition, in 2004 number of folks who were undernourished were 873 and in 2006 were three millions that was more than before. Furthermore, in 2008, number of people were 924 millions and in 2009 they were 1024 millions. Paradoxically, in the pie chart price of grains in inital year were same with 200$ per tonne in year 2000. After this, rate of wheat increased in 2002 with 400$ per tonne but the cost of rice remain still till 2004 with same tonnes. However, the price of wheat decreased a little bit till 2006 and then increased dramatically with avoidable fluctuations approximately 1100 tonne over the given period whares the price of rice increased with fluctuations till the final year with fluctuations till the final year with 900$ per tonne.
The presented table delineate the individual that remain
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straved
in the
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world wide
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between 2000 to 2009
, whereas the pie chart depicts the
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price
of
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rice
and
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wheat
in the same
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year
all around the world
Overall
, it is explicit from the table that the high level of undernourished masses from
first
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year
till final
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year
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increased
significantly
.
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,
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price
of
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rice
and
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wheat
were same in the initial
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year
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some
certain
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fluctuations
the rate of
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wheat
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increased
over the
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given
period. It can
be inferred
from the table that in
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year
2000 number of undernourished masses were 857 and in
next
two years figure
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increased
with five
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millions
.
In addition
, in 2004 number of folks who
were undernourished
were 873 and in 2006 were three
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millions
that was more than
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before
.
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, in 2008, number of
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people
were 924
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millions
and in 2009 they were 1024
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millions
.
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, in the pie chart
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price
of grains in
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inital
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year
were same with
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200$
per tonne in
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year
2000. After this, rate of
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wheat
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increased
in 2002 with
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400$
per tonne
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the cost of
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rice
remain
still
till 2004 with same tonnes.
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, the
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of
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wheat
decreased a
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till 2006 and then
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increased
dramatically
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fluctuations
approximately 1100
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tonne
over the
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given
period
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whares
the
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rice
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with
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year
with
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$900".
900$
per tonne.

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