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The table shows information and predictions regarding people aged 65 and up in three countries for the years 1988,2000 and 2030

The table shows information and predictions regarding people aged 65 and up in three countries for the years 1988, 2000 and 2030 B7DD9
The table provides information and forecasts about the change in the proportion of the population of people who are 65 and above in Canada, Germany and the UK. Overall, Germany had the highest number of people aged 65 and above and will continue to do so in 2030, while UK will follow the trend of having the least population in that age range. United Kingdom had the least number of citizens who were 65 plus at 14. 23% in 1988 and with a slight increase at 14. 89 % in 2000. Canada had a population of 16. 32% falling in this age bracket, which saw a rise till 20. 67% in the year 2000 and is expected to have 26. 35% of its residents with the age of 65 and onwards in 2030. Germany had the highest amount of people falling in this category at 20. 45% in 1998 and 25. 32% in 2000, they are assumed to have just less than a third of its population in this section by 2030.
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who are 65 and above in Canada, Germany and the UK.

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aged 65 and above and will continue to do
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in 2030, while UK will follow the trend of having the least
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United Kingdom had the least number of citizens who were 65 plus at 14. 23% in 1988 and with a slight increase at 14. 89 % in 2000. Canada had a
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of 16. 32% falling in this age bracket, which
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a rise till 20. 67% in the year 2000 and is
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to have 26. 35% of its residents with the age of 65 and onwards in 2030.

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falling in this category at 20. 45% in 1998 and 25. 32% in 2000, they
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