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The table shows existing and projected changes in the proportion of people over 65 in the populations of three countries from 2015 to 2030 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows existing and projected changes in the proportion of people over 65 in the populations of three countries from 2015 to 2030 ljxqK
The table shows the information of significant and projected changes of the population of people with age over 65 in three countries in the period of 15 years in between 2015 and 2030. Overall, Canada experienced more changes among United Kingdom and Hungary. In the beginning of 2015, United Kingdom had only 18. 1% of the proportion of people who were over 65. However, this country prognosticated that the proportion would gain 0. 9% in 2020. The amount of population predicted will continue to raise until 2030 with 21. 6% of people. In the other hand, Hungary, who had narrow margin to United Kingdom with 17. 6% in 2015, would also face increased of population in the year 2020, 2025, and 2030, with 19. 4%, 20. 4%, and 21. 3% respectively. Lastly, Canada had exactly 16%, make it the littlest measurement of people over 65 among the remaining two. Moreover, Canada predicted to gain approximately 2% per 5 years. Eventually, Canada would be the country with highest population of 22. 7%.
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with age over 65 in three countries in the period of 15 years in between 2015 and 2030.
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18. 1% of the proportion of
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who were over 65.
However
, this country prognosticated that the proportion would gain 0. 9% in 2020. The amount of
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population
predicted will continue to raise until 2030 with 21. 6% of
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people
. In the other hand, Hungary, who had narrow margin
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to United Kingdom
with 17. 6% in 2015, would
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population
in the year 2020, 2025, and 2030, with 19. 4%, 20. 4%, and 21. 3%
respectively
.

Lastly
, Canada had exactly 16%,
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people
over 65 among the remaining two.
Moreover
, Canada predicted to gain approximately 2% per 5 years.
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, Canada would be the country with
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highest
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population
of 22. 7%.
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IELTS academic The table shows existing and projected changes in the proportion of people over 65 in the populations of three countries from 2015 to 2030

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