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The graphs below show the annual expenditure of university students in three countries in 2003

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Given are the pie charts illustrating the percentage of per student spent money on daily expenditure in three countries around 2003. It is clear from the pie charts that each student in country A spent the most money on accomodation, food, books, leisure and others. By contrast, country C was the category receiving the least expenditure. In country A, the rate of students expending on accommodation was the highest, at 45%, while, the figure for food and leisure was significant lower, at 22%. University students who paid out for other things accounted for 8%. Meanwhile, the percentage of students who used money for books were lowest, at 3%. The proportion of the annual expenditure of students spending on accommodation was highest among 5 types of expense in country B, at 35%, while, in country C, food was the primary consumption. In terms of books, the percentage of expenditure on this category in country C was higher than country B, at 21%. In 2003, undergraduate spent on other things in both countries made up the smallest proportion, at only 6% and 1% respectively.
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the pie charts illustrating the percentage of per
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student
spent money on daily expenditure in three
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countries
around 2003.

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clear
from the pie charts that each
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student
in
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country
A spent the most money on
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accomodation
, food, books, leisure
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and others
. By contrast,
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country
C was the category receiving the least expenditure.

In
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country
A, the rate of
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students
expending on accommodation was the highest, at 45%, while, the figure for food and leisure was significant lower, at 22%. University
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students
who paid out for other things accounted for 8%. Meanwhile, the percentage of
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students
who
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used
money for books were lowest, at 3%.

The proportion of the annual expenditure of
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students
spending on accommodation was highest among 5 types of expense in
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country
B, at 35%, while, in
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country
C, food was the primary consumption. In terms of books, the percentage of expenditure on this category in
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country
C was higher than
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country
B, at 21%. In 2003, undergraduate spent on other things in both
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countries
made up the smallest proportion, at
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only
6% and 1%
respectively
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