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The table shows detail about the population figure older people in 3 countries between 1988 to 2030.

The table shows detail about the population figure older people in 3 countries between 1988 to 2030. BYY2j
The given table chart gives information about the population ratio for elderly people in three nations from 1988 to 2030. Units are measured by percentages. Overall, it can be seen that the population rate for older people in all 3 countries displayed an upward trend. Although the population figure was the highest in Germany, there was lowest in the UK throughout the time period. Firstly, while almost 17% of the population had been noticed in Canada in 1988, this rate significantly increased by just above 20% in 2000. After then, it is estimated that this figure will a significant rise to 26. 35 in 2030. In contrast, this ratio for Germany had been far higher by 20. 45 than Canada in the first year, yet there was a drastic incline by 6% in 2000. It is predicted that this figure will gradual to 30. 42% in the last year. Likewise, the ratio for the UK was dramatically less than Germany and Canada. Moreover, as it had been inclined from 14% in 1988 and 15% in 2000, which will a sharp climb to 20% in the last year
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table chart gives information about the
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population
ratio for elderly
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people
in three nations from 1988 to 2030. Units
are measured
by percentages.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the
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population
rate for older
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people
in all 3 countries displayed an upward trend. Although the
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population
figure was the highest in Germany, there was lowest in the UK throughout the time period.

Firstly
, while almost 17% of the
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population
had
been noticed
in Canada in 1988, this rate
significantly
increased by
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just
above 20% in 2000. After then, it
is estimated
that this figure will a significant rise to 26. 35 in 2030.
In contrast
, this ratio for Germany had been far higher by 20. 45 than Canada in the
first
year,
yet
there was a drastic incline by 6% in 2000. It
is predicted
that this figure will gradual to 30. 42% in the
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last year
.
Likewise
, the ratio for the UK was
dramatically
less than Germany and Canada.
Moreover
, as it had
been inclined
from 14% in 1988 and 15% in 2000, which will a sharp climb to 20% in the last year
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