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The table illustrates the population of people attending four secondary schools in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009.

The table illustrates the population of people attending four secondary schools in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009. B7BLj
Overall, specialist schools was the least participated school in all three years while community schools attendance rose up to 5 times and ended as the highest attended school. Voluntary controlled and grammar schools lost half of their pupils during these years. Grammar(24%) and voluntary controlled schools(58%) saw major decline in pupils attending their schools(12% and 20% respectively), with grammar school losing half the proportion of people from 2005 and voluntary controlled schools losing 14% and 18% attendance in 2005 and 2009. A considerable growth in the number of people attending the community school was seen which grew steadily at 20% and 26% and had almost a five fold increase(58%) from the initial year(12%). There was a steady decline amongst students attending specialist schools which started at 12% and fell 1% in each of those years.
Overall
, specialist
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schools
was the least participated
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school
in all three years while community
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schools
attendance rose up to 5 times and ended as the highest attended
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school
. Voluntary controlled and grammar
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schools
lost half of their pupils during these years.

Grammar(24%) and voluntary controlled
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schools(58%)
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major decline in pupils attending their
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schools(12%
and 20%
respectively
), with grammar
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school
losing half the proportion of
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people
from 2005 and voluntary controlled
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schools
losing 14% and 18% attendance in 2005 and 2009.

A considerable growth in the number of
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people
attending the community
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school
was
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which grew
steadily
at 20% and 26% and had almost a five fold increase(58%) from the initial year(12%). There was a steady decline amongst students attending specialist
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schools
which
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at 12% and fell 1% in each of those years.
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IELTS academic The table illustrates the population of people attending four secondary schools in the years 2000, 2005 and 2009.

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